I think your point about moderation tooling is worth a bullet point on its own. I think more tools for users to stay safe and for moderators to keep their instance safe would go a long way, and that there are people who would be willing and able to donate their time implementing them.
Also, the current draft is still pretty focused on Mastodon. I think it's worth talking more about how the problems (and solutions) are different on different platforms, or if not then talk about working on the problem for Mastodon/microblogging as opposed to "the fediverse."